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【案例1】
原文:Environmental protection has more and more gotten the attention of the countries around the world, and the best way of environmental protection has become the focus of the debate。
修改:Environmental protection has drawn increasing attention of the countries around the world, and people have been debating about the best way to protect the environment。
解析:
(1)“受到越來越多的關(guān)注”原文用has more and more gotten the attention,是典型的中文直譯,不符合英文的行文習(xí)慣,應(yīng)改成has drawn increasing attention。
(2)has become the focus of the debate即“成為討論的焦點(diǎn)”,但更地道的英文表達(dá)可以人為主語,如:...people have been debating about the best way to protect the environment。
【案例2】
原文:Gradually improved public awareness of environmental protection and insufficient environmental protection measures have been very difficult to reverse the trend of ecological and environmental degradation。
修改:Although more people have become aware of environmental problems and have taken measures to protect the environment, the trend of ecological and environmental degradation is hard to be reversed。
解析:原句英文脫胎于中文句式“……的措施很難逆轉(zhuǎn)生態(tài)環(huán)境惡化的趨勢”,但直譯出來的英文卻是典型的Chinglish。修改版本調(diào)整了整句話的句式,把原本過長的主語變成了狀語從句,并用the trend做主句的主語,讓句式更平衡,表達(dá)更西化。
在托福寫作備考時(shí),要特別注意英語表達(dá)和漢語表達(dá)的差別,不要盲目照搬中文的句式。只有多多輸入優(yōu)質(zhì)的英語原文,并留心比較中文與英文的行文思路和表達(dá)上的差異,才能有效避免中式英文。
(來源:滬江英語 作者:Eileen)
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